I like the way that you have made the image look ghostly and title it distinct as it adds some irony to the picture. As well as this I like the font that you have used on the masthead because its a bit edgier than the normal texts. But, I feel that the bullet points could be replaced by something else as they do not really belong on the front of the magazine, and also the text that you have used for bullet points is not very clear so I would definitely change that. Similarly with the text the sell line at the bottom is not very readable so i'd change that. Also i dont like the gap at the bottom from the end of the page to the sell line, i'd have it so that there was no gap. Other than that i think that this is a very successful first draft.
Well done on your rough draft Joseph. I like the menu bar used at the bottom to advertise some of the main stories, this means that you can include important information for the readers, whilst keeping the image more clear and creating a more minimalist effect. However I think that the bar should be moved down slightly in order to create an equidistance, as the masthead is closer to the top and this uneven distance makes the menu bar look out of place. I do think the simple approach, for example the uniform font scheme and the black and white colour scheme, along with the slightly transparent image, make the magazine look quite professional and well planned out. Overall I think this is a good rough draft and has good potential.
I like that everything is equidistant, it makes it appear professional. However, the sell line at the bottom should extend to cover the bottom of the magazine, instead of leaving blank space below itself. While the colour scheme works well, I would suggest that you add another colour as a highlight, so that it is not completely greyscale. I would also suggest that you take another photo where your talent faces the camera more, so that you can see their face, that would make them recognisable and encourage people to buy the magazine.
I like the way that you have made the image look ghostly and title it distinct as it adds some irony to the picture. As well as this I like the font that you have used on the masthead because its a bit edgier than the normal texts. But, I feel that the bullet points could be replaced by something else as they do not really belong on the front of the magazine, and also the text that you have used for bullet points is not very clear so I would definitely change that. Similarly with the text the sell line at the bottom is not very readable so i'd change that. Also i dont like the gap at the bottom from the end of the page to the sell line, i'd have it so that there was no gap. Other than that i think that this is a very successful first draft.
ReplyDeleteWell done on your rough draft Joseph. I like the menu bar used at the bottom to advertise some of the main stories, this means that you can include important information for the readers, whilst keeping the image more clear and creating a more minimalist effect. However I think that the bar should be moved down slightly in order to create an equidistance, as the masthead is closer to the top and this uneven distance makes the menu bar look out of place. I do think the simple approach, for example the uniform font scheme and the black and white colour scheme, along with the slightly transparent image, make the magazine look quite professional and well planned out. Overall I think this is a good rough draft and has good potential.
ReplyDeleteI like that everything is equidistant, it makes it appear professional. However, the sell line at the bottom should extend to cover the bottom of the magazine, instead of leaving blank space below itself. While the colour scheme works well, I would suggest that you add another colour as a highlight, so that it is not completely greyscale. I would also suggest that you take another photo where your talent faces the camera more, so that you can see their face, that would make them recognisable and encourage people to buy the magazine.
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